i like it
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| Author: | wut2say [ Sat Jan 21, 2006 5:43 pm ] |
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i did a poem before but it wasnt really good i was wondering if this one was better: once i thought i heard a roar once i thought i saw some wings once i thought i heard my name soaring through the breeze once i heard a little snuff from somewhere in the trees once i thought i saw some eyes staring through the leaves are you out there watching me as ive always felt or am i simply coincidence on your search for some one else once i thought i saw you watching from high up in your roost once i watched a hatchling fly for the first time with a boost from the nest of its old home as it went to find its own and then i felt you watching again like in old times are you still there watching me as all these years go by |
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| Author: | Firuweata [ Sat Jan 21, 2006 8:28 pm ] |
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It's good... But then again, I've never been an expert in poetry. In fact, my poetry is widely accepted as the fourth worst in the entire universe... |
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| Author: | + Silver - Orbs + [ Sun Jan 22, 2006 7:15 am ] |
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i like it
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| Author: | wut2say [ Thu Jan 26, 2006 5:50 pm ] |
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wow thats a relief i thought that no one would respond but im glad someone did it makes me feel better 
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| Author: | Firuweata [ Sat Jan 28, 2006 1:18 am ] |
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Anytime... However, if I put one of my poems on here, you may not survive... It is recognized as the fourth worst in the universe, after all... I recited it into the winds one day, and BAM!!! Hurricane Katerina... |
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| Author: | Chalgrish [ Sat Jan 28, 2006 10:08 am ] |
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lacks a certain iambic pentameter. |
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| Author: | Firuweata [ Sat Jan 28, 2006 8:10 pm ] |
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Poems don't have to have an iambic petameter for them to be good... But then, what do I know about poetry??? |
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| Author: | wut2say [ Tue Jan 31, 2006 9:11 pm ] |
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yeah really ...there r some good poems that dont have a.....iambic penta-wuts-ya-ma-call-it. so dont be so brash |
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