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really? im not
it makes me really mad cause i have stuff to say but i just cant type it fast enough.......so i write my stories down
it makes me really mad cause i have stuff to say but i just cant type it fast enough.......so i write my stories down
If you were to juggle a lion, and a house cat, the end result would look something like a tattered chunk of red fabric. The cat would scratch anything within reach, and the lion would just eat you. The lesson to learn? Make sure you eat your spinach.
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This is very well done for the beginning. My sugestion would be double spacing between paragraphs to seperate them better, and double space for dialogue. Otherwise it's very good.
Even though Chal might tihnk it's lacking depth, it really doesn't matter, because many good writers spend months or years on their pieces, many starting out just like this or worse.
I write something first. Then I go back and edit it, then expand upon it. Then I do it again. And again. Until I think it's finished.
It's all a process.
Even though Chal might tihnk it's lacking depth, it really doesn't matter, because many good writers spend months or years on their pieces, many starting out just like this or worse.
I write something first. Then I go back and edit it, then expand upon it. Then I do it again. And again. Until I think it's finished.
It's all a process.
Fear sam bith a loisgeas a mhà s, ‘s e fhèin a dh’fheumas suidhe air.
Far an taine ‘n abhainn, ‘s ann as mò a fuaim.
Is ladarna gach cù air a shitig fhèin.
Far an taine ‘n abhainn, ‘s ann as mò a fuaim.
Is ladarna gach cù air a shitig fhèin.
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The writing process
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Tip: if you have the writer's mind the words flow from your mind to the paper you get your idea's purley from your imagination....
1. Start a DND game or other creative activity.
2. Read every book you can find on the subject you want to write about.
3. Mush it all togeather in your own unique way using every ounce of creativity you can muster.
4. contunue writing untill you feel you have done your story justice.
5. Edit the out of it!!!
-Fishy
Tip: if you have the writer's mind the words flow from your mind to the paper you get your idea's purley from your imagination....
1. Start a DND game or other creative activity.
2. Read every book you can find on the subject you want to write about.
3. Mush it all togeather in your own unique way using every ounce of creativity you can muster.
4. contunue writing untill you feel you have done your story justice.
5. Edit the out of it!!!
Anything is Possible...
And Yet, Nothing is Probable.
And Yet, Nothing is Probable.
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I had a moment like that, and it was funny, because I had already gone to bed (my parents are sticklers for 'bed time' and it freakin bugs me). I ended up writing an entire life story for a character by the light of a book light, on the paper I had my Lost World cheats on.
Fear sam bith a loisgeas a mhà s, ‘s e fhèin a dh’fheumas suidhe air.
Far an taine ‘n abhainn, ‘s ann as mò a fuaim.
Is ladarna gach cù air a shitig fhèin.
Far an taine ‘n abhainn, ‘s ann as mò a fuaim.
Is ladarna gach cù air a shitig fhèin.
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I write about true events that most don't know about...
For instance, did you know that the Titanic never hit an iceberg. Its maiden voyage was a complete success...
This was because the Titanic was a luxury submarine, not a luxury cruiser as most thought...
However, when the Titanic was still docked, the British Intelligence was developing a machine that alters peoples memories...
However, an accident occured, and many people thought it was a luxury cruiser, and not a submarine...
The only ones unaffected were those inside the sub, because the walls were so thick. And I'm sad to say, that once people had already boarded, and the vessel was launched, it was only a matter of time before they tried to submerge the Titanic...
As the submarine descended into the cold, unforgiving Atlantic, those onboard saw the "iceberg" they hit...
This was actually just a cloud of steam released by the subs engines...
So, next time you're at McDonalds, and the cashier announces "The first one to tell me the TRUTH behind the Titanic gets a free order of fries", you'll be ready, and will soon be eating the fries of victory...
For instance, did you know that the Titanic never hit an iceberg. Its maiden voyage was a complete success...
This was because the Titanic was a luxury submarine, not a luxury cruiser as most thought...
However, when the Titanic was still docked, the British Intelligence was developing a machine that alters peoples memories...
However, an accident occured, and many people thought it was a luxury cruiser, and not a submarine...
The only ones unaffected were those inside the sub, because the walls were so thick. And I'm sad to say, that once people had already boarded, and the vessel was launched, it was only a matter of time before they tried to submerge the Titanic...
As the submarine descended into the cold, unforgiving Atlantic, those onboard saw the "iceberg" they hit...
This was actually just a cloud of steam released by the subs engines...
So, next time you're at McDonalds, and the cashier announces "The first one to tell me the TRUTH behind the Titanic gets a free order of fries", you'll be ready, and will soon be eating the fries of victory...
I stayed in New Orleans for Hurricane Katrina, and all I got was this lousy T-shirt, a new Cadillac, and a plasma screen T.V....
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