a question and then a story concept, Maybe
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a question and then a story concept, Maybe
was not entirely sure where to put this question that will eventually have a story in it. Where do you put your ideas when you want help on them for like a book?
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Re: a question and then a story concept, Maybe
this is the right place, or it was anyways.
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Re: a question and then a story concept, Maybe
Thank you and now my concept
She was directly below him, all he had to do was wait for her to move a bit farther forward and… Crack! He was plunging down. His instincts taking over allow him to land on his feet in a crouch with the only damage being to his jeans. The she dragon that was his query was already in her true form and about to take flight. He raises his handgun that was equipped with scale piercing bullets and fires five times at the large creature’s left wing. At the time she had been in the air and so plummets to the ground from the loss of one of her flight appendages. Moving forward to behold the last seconds of her life the hunter stops, waiting for his prey’s last words.
When he came into a brighter section of the forested area the dragon gained a look of recognition on her face. She then yelled in shock, “You! Why are you doing this?”
“I have no choice,” replied the hunter in a choked voice. He then raised the gun, for what he hoped was the last time that day, pulling the trigger he shuts his eyes as if that will block out the shot and her scream. Holstering his gun he then pulls his cell phone from his pocket and uses the only programmed speed dial.
“What?” asked the voice on the other side as way of a polite greeting.
“The job is done, she is dead,” the assassin replied with as much malice as he was able to give while not revealing that he was miffed.
She was directly below him, all he had to do was wait for her to move a bit farther forward and… Crack! He was plunging down. His instincts taking over allow him to land on his feet in a crouch with the only damage being to his jeans. The she dragon that was his query was already in her true form and about to take flight. He raises his handgun that was equipped with scale piercing bullets and fires five times at the large creature’s left wing. At the time she had been in the air and so plummets to the ground from the loss of one of her flight appendages. Moving forward to behold the last seconds of her life the hunter stops, waiting for his prey’s last words.
When he came into a brighter section of the forested area the dragon gained a look of recognition on her face. She then yelled in shock, “You! Why are you doing this?”
“I have no choice,” replied the hunter in a choked voice. He then raised the gun, for what he hoped was the last time that day, pulling the trigger he shuts his eyes as if that will block out the shot and her scream. Holstering his gun he then pulls his cell phone from his pocket and uses the only programmed speed dial.
“What?” asked the voice on the other side as way of a polite greeting.
“The job is done, she is dead,” the assassin replied with as much malice as he was able to give while not revealing that he was miffed.
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Re: a question and then a story concept, Maybe
I like it, I think it would do good as an opening for a book, or opening for a chapter or something like that.
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Re: a question and then a story concept, Maybe
To answer the first question, here, I guess.
As for the opening, it's "quarry". Other than that, it sounds cool, I can't wait to read more.
As for the opening, it's "quarry". Other than that, it sounds cool, I can't wait to read more.
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Re: a question and then a story concept, Maybe
I like it
quick reminder: if you are going to publish your story don't forget to coppy right it so no one could steal your idea
cant wait to read more of it
quick reminder: if you are going to publish your story don't forget to coppy right it so no one could steal your idea
cant wait to read more of it
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Re: a question and then a story concept, Maybe
As to the read more, I am afraid that is impossible at the moment for I need your help. You see I need the main character who was not in that prologue to have a sister not at home but I do not have that experience, so has any ever had a sibling leave or die by chance? If you do not want to talk I understand but otherwise I want some help
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I have an evil sister ( she is not dead and she never left ) but other than that I can't help you
unless you want me to talk about her lol.
unless you want me to talk about her lol.
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Re: a question and then a story concept, Maybe
I've never lost a family member, thank God, but I can write as if I had. If need be, I'll help.
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Thanks i need some one with that ability. Could you say what emotions rush through someones head after like a year or two? Anniversary of event type thing
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A deep ache, like that of an old injury flaring up. A sense of loss, undefined. The character may not even realize he's thinking of her at first.
Can you PM the details of the sister's departure? I.E. the character's fault, bad fortune, etc.
Can you PM the details of the sister's departure? I.E. the character's fault, bad fortune, etc.
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