once

wut2say · Post by **wut2say** » Sat Jan 21, 2006 4:43 pm

i did a poem before but it wasnt really good i was wondering if this one was better:

once
i thought i heard a roar

once
i thought i saw some wings

once
i thought i heard my name
soaring through the breeze

once
i heard a little snuff
from somewhere in the trees

once
i thought i saw some eyes
staring through the leaves

are you out there watching me
as ive always felt

or am i simply coincidence
on your search for some one else

once
i thought i saw you watching
from high up in your roost

once
i watched a hatchling fly
for the first time with a boost

from the nest of its old home
as it went to find its own

and then i felt you watching
again like in old times

are you still there watching me
as all these years go by

Firuweata · Post by **Firuweata** » Sat Jan 21, 2006 7:28 pm

It's good...

But then again, I've never been an expert in poetry. In fact, my poetry is widely accepted as the fourth worst in the entire universe...

+ Silver - Orbs + · Post by **+ Silver - Orbs +** » Sun Jan 22, 2006 6:15 am

i like it

wut2say · Post by **wut2say** » Thu Jan 26, 2006 4:50 pm

wow thats a relief i thought that no one would respond but im glad someone did it makes me feel better

Firuweata · Post by **Firuweata** » Sat Jan 28, 2006 12:18 am

Anytime...

However, if I put one of my poems on here, you may not survive...

It is recognized as the fourth worst in the universe, after all...

I recited it into the winds one day, and BAM!!! Hurricane Katerina...

Chalgrish · Post by **Chalgrish** » Sat Jan 28, 2006 9:08 am

lacks a certain iambic pentameter.

Firuweata · Post by **Firuweata** » Sat Jan 28, 2006 7:10 pm

Poems don't have to have an iambic petameter for them to be good...

But then, what do I know about poetry???

wut2say · Post by **wut2say** » Tue Jan 31, 2006 8:11 pm

yeah really

...there r some good poems that dont have a.....iambic penta-wuts-ya-ma-call-it. so dont be so brash