Playing with fire

[Azrixaris Vorn]

I'm going to start a roleplay about some peoples who do something.

Plot= We'll see where we go.

Setting= Starts in a Forested area on a mountain beside a lake at night.

::My character::
Name=Azrixaris Vorn
Species= Dragon/Cat Demon
Gender= Female
Other= 5 ft. tall, bipedal
7 ft. long
black fur
navy wings, 40 ft. span
black mane
claws, spikes, horns are silver tipped with navy
7 horns on the back of head
anthropomorphic
intelligent, weak, tempermental, cruel


(I'm not sure if I got the character description setup right, but this is the first roleplay I've ever done out of Neopets, so don't get mad if it's wrong.)

[Tourniquet]

Ah, not meaning to split hairs or anything, but you haven't mentioned anything about a tail and yet your bipedal character is 7feet long. This gives me a somewhat amusing and highly disturbing image of 'the almighty' just grabbing the front and back of someone's head and stretching them into a slightly peculiar shape.

Here, we have expectations of a decent standard of role-playing. Unlike the dribble of nine year olds that you find on Neo Pets. So just make sure you read over everything to be sure that it all makes sense, okay?

[Azrixaris Vorn]

Yea, my character has a tail. But I consider myself a decent roleplayer. I still need some practice for making sense of my description, though.

[Aspaheir]

Takhisis? You mean from Dragonlance??

I'll help you get your story going though.

::My characters::

Name: Scryser Arsagon
Race: Human (Mage)
Age: 24
Eye Color: Gold
Status: Currently rated 2rd strongest mage in the world, working his way up
Bio: Scryser is a top-class mage tirelessly working against Azrixaris Vorn
Attitude: Stubborn, Resilient
Hair Color: Black
Weapon: Staff, Silver Dagger
Occupation: Mage

Name: Ariakan
Race: Elf
Age: 90
Eye Color: Sky Blue
Status: a general in Scryser's army
Bio: He usually goes on missions for Scryser, is always busy
Attitude: Stubborn
Weapon: Sword, Crossbow
Hair Color: Black
Occupation: Warrior

Name: Aspaheir
Race: Human
Age: 24
Eye Color: Black
Status: A colleague with Scryser
Bio: Diplomat and warrior
Attitude: Resilient
Weapon: Sword
Hair Color: Blond
Occupation: Warrior

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Come up with a plot and I'll help you with yur Role-Play!!

[Azrixaris Vorn]

Yupp, dragonlance. Thanks in advance.

[Pandora]

*eyes grow wide*
AHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!Not another one!!!!!!!!!!!

*smiles warmly*
ehh,ehhm,sorry about that! alright you seem like an intelagent person so lets try to work on what you don't HAVE.



YOU NEED A BACKGROUND AND STORY LINE!!!!! No offence but you need a lot more than just "people are going to do something", Well I sure do hope so! you need to tell exactly what is going on. What is the situation?why is the charachter in this situation? how do other characters come into this situation. Tell exactly whats going on to a "T"


allright next up, yur characters, you seem to have the characters up ok, but it could use a little work. I'll give you a basic example of a character set up, if you get this roll-play better organized and add a lot more backbone, I'll join and use this example as one of my characters in yur roll play.

EXAMPLE:

Name: Midnight

age: unknown

gender:female

race:orcale

Eye color:two crystal blue eyes, and a litaraly flamming red eye on her forehead

height: 5.6ft

clothes: Bright red dress-like tunic

Hair color and style: waist long silver hair,with shoulder length red streaks that tend to curle around her face

description:She has glossy silver fur that covers her whole body. she has knine features such as her nose,claws,fangs,and paw-like hands. She has a set feathered wings on both her back and right above her elbows. her ears are like those of a dragon's and are closer to the top of her head,and hang out from under her hair. She also has a long slinder tail that is bushy and red at the very tip of it.

weapons: Alimace,a half mace half sword-like weapon. the blade itself is about two feet long not including the part of the blade that is bent to the side,in a slinder foot long streach shaped a lot like an axe head. A black rose design can be seen on both the tip of the blade and where it starts to bend,and a simmering red design runs down the blade,looks a lot like blood.

Bio: A very witty timetravler who speaks her mind, but it is not a good idea to get on her bad side. She helps those who are a crutal part of the time-line in whatever error she has been placed in. She is none the less kindhearted to all,and fun loving,and may not seem very serious at times. Even so she is very wise,and you can't go wrong by following her advice.

next, you need to add a lot more to yur setting,explain the time and place more, are you doing a modern,or a fantasy like setting, do the people in your story have technolagy? if so how much? What kind of place is this lake like? is it crystal clear,green and murky? what? what does it have by it? what kind of creature are there? make sure to add lots of detail to the setting and the story line.


also you need a HOOK.
give other RPers a reason to join yur roll play.

Oh,and give some rules, or guide line to yur roll play, tell every one what they can and cannot do, or what kinda chracters they are allowed to have.

How hope this will be enough to go by,please tell me if you need any help.

[Azrixaris Vorn]

OK. But I have no idea where to start, plot wise. And as for the settings, You can pick.

[Aspaheir]

Use this template I copied off Pandora:


Setting

This is when and where the story takes place. Now you have when but you don't have where. Describe where this story takes place,and be sure to use lots of detail.

Background

Give a background to the character and explain the situation,and how the chracter gets into the situation more fully.

Characters

Explain what yur characters are like, what hair color what race,adittude,their stats,ect.

rules
state what rules are in affect in your roll-play, like what kind of characters are allowed .

Hook

Challage other RPers to join in, give them a reason to join YOUR roll play!
even ask for suggestion to make them want to join.